Lacey

well aren't you hard to please!!! there ain't NO guy who doesn't atleast fall into one of those categories!

Girls. there are no good guys. never lower your standards. if you can find one that is nice to you and can hold a job, you hold on! hold on like heck! because there are no good guys. in the movie the holiday jude law plays the perfect guy. BUT HE DOES NOT EXIST. so, get used to it. =D

you people are retarded. cutting is a MAJOR mentel problem! you want to sit there and hurt yourself and your family, go right ahead. nobody else cares if you do it besides them. I certainly don't care. but you do need help. mental help, and a LOT of it!!!!

You have brought me to that moment where words run dry, to that moment where speech disappears into silence, silence . . . I have come here, hardly knowing the reason why . . . In my mind, I've already imagined our bodies entwining defenceless and silent - and now I am here with you: no second thoughts, I've decided, decided . . . Past the point of no return - no going back now: our passion-play has now, at last, begun . . . Past all thought of right or wrong - one final question: how long should we two wait, before we're one . . .? When will the blood begin to race the sleeping bud burst into bloom? When will the flames, at last, consume us . . .? Love Lacey

lol, a stanza is a line in a poem, each line is one stanza

The fourth through eighth stanza is a bit repetitive, try dropping the fifth through eighth stanza, and go on to the next "If only you hadn't left me so soon... But I know they say you're in a better place."

"Infectious." "The sound of her voice makes me Shudder as if it were a highly infectious carcinogen Airborne, it sets in your lungs, and makes you feel like you can't Breathe. With hardly any patience at all, the mind Numbing voice continues, wailing, and shreiking, with her Annoyingly preppy attitude, How I despise this! Knowing I am not the only one who feels this way, I feel it's safe to write down. Not that I would CARE otherwise.

"Waiting" "Forever I've waited for you. Yearning for you, but still I stand alone. You're never here, always waiting for your call. Out with your friends? Well Now me too! Forgotten, I have none. So I'll wait for that Exciting moment, that you give me. A simple phone call To let me know you are still thinking of me." Ambivalence is the showing of or feeling of two very different feelings at the same time... such as love and hate, desire, and repulsion. You all should take five minutes to yourselves, and see what you come up with. Love Lacey

Great last line, work on wordiness, though, otherwise, its very good Love Lacey

Very good poem, though there are a few cliche's, try to stay away from those, they're poetry killers! "I was blind, but now I can see" = Amazing Grace Try to stay away from lines that have already been used, poetry should come straight from the poet, not songs, or old poetry. I loved the lest line, though I would take out the "and" "good luck without me, I'm saying good-bye." much more feeling keep up the good works Love Lacey

Great last line, keep working on it, though, True stories always come out the best Love Lacey

.....shouldn't light come before trees and flowers? they do live off of light. o.o

well.... Wolfie.... I've been meaning to tell you this.... but..........

lol. Chicken Soup

BUT IT'S TRUE!!!!